Chapter 519
The problem is that when I was writing, the world had already started to accelerate [after all, the system is too scary, even if the Cocoon of Finality is not human or even without emotions, it would still scare me crazy in my eyes], so many things could not be as gentle as in the original work.
The reason why so many things happened in the Chiyou chapter of the original work is partly because Himeko wanted to find the Stigmata to extend her life, and partly because everyone didn't have much information after entering, which led to a big problem.
The main characters thought that two things were Chiyou's heart, so they blew them up in order to get rid of Chiyou. However, they later discovered that these were actually the seals of Danzhu and Cangxuan, and that Chiyou's core was actually located elsewhere.
This was a mistake made due to insufficient information. If the protagonist were present and still tried to break the two seals, he would be out of his mind. I would never write it like that.
Therefore, under these circumstances, if the story continues as it is in the original novel, Chiyou will never have a chance to wake up.
In that part of the story, the main characters went to the Nine Nether very calmly, calmly dismantled the Titan Mech, and then calmly returned...
—I'd rather not write anything; nobody wants to read this kind of plot.
In situations like this, someone has to step in.
It's impossible to expect Xing, that idiot who was easily fooled by Bronya's words, to cause trouble, so we can only hope that World Serpent will step in.
At this point, things had started to spiral out of my control.
The World Serpent has a tendency to acquire Chiyou. Raven had no problem breaking the seal in the past, but the problem was how Raven would escape.
The Quantum Teleportation System first appeared in the original work in the Anti-Entropy Invasion arc, which took place in 2014-2015 at an uncertain time. The timeline of the Anti-Entropy Invasion arc was after the Nine Nether / Chiyou arc, so its existence was uncertain at that time.
To improve the quality of this book, I had to have Cocolia create it.
Then, back to the plot, it's hard to believe that Quantum Teleportation System developed ahead of time without the technical support of conservatives would be without some flaws. It's uncertain whether Raven could even make it this far.
Considering that Chiyou You is supposedly capable of absorbing everything around him, even if the system can be activated, it's hard to say whether he has the energy to escape.
At this point, many things are truly doomed.
Raven can't escape, and once she can't escape, the protagonist will inevitably kill Chiyou. Given these established conditions, it's almost unavoidable that the protagonist's group will find and capture her.
Of course, it wouldn't be a problem to forcefully avoid it, but everyone would definitely be unhappy if the troublemaker got away at the time. After thinking about it, I still feel that I can't write it that way.
As a result, after the Raven was captured, a major problem arose.
At this point, I must admit that although I have been speeding up the plot, my initial idea was definitely not to speed it up to this extent.
I vaguely remember that I didn't intend to put so much pressure on Lin Yu when I started. In fact, when I finished the last book, I thought, "This time, I hope to write a light and enjoyable story that, while not daring to be too risqué, can still be a little risqué."
However, as it turns out, plans often can't keep up with changes.
When the plot reaches a certain point, and logic becomes important, the author will lose some control over the story.
For example, when Raven was captured, her biggest thought was to live well. After being captured, she would definitely choose to save her life and sell to World Serpent [in the original work, she was not considered a die-hard fan, and even broke away from World Serpent at one point].
Raven sold the World Serpent, and considering that she was the representative of Kamiya Pharmaceuticals outside, the main characters and Otto were able to dig out a lot of information by following the clues.
It was inevitable that the Gray Serpent would be taken down.
After Gray Serpent was taken down, it had to find more people to exploit, but that's another story.
The storylines that unfolded around this character are arguably one of the fundamental reasons for the plot's further acceleration.
In a sense, Su, mentioned in the chapter related to the protagonist's character design, belongs to the same category of characters—because of these two characters, the protagonist's side became too strong, which made the plot difficult to write and was particularly awkward.
This character wasn't particularly important in the story, but because of one mistake, Raven made it difficult for me to write many of the later plot points. I guess I learned my lesson.
On another note, in my opinion, Raven's actions in this book were the kind that deserved to die. The reason I didn't find an opportunity to kill her later was purely because Lin Yu and I were mentally torturing each other, which caused me to almost completely forget about this character.
It took several months for me to remember her during the Dominance Herrscher arc. Oh, I think she had already gone to headquarters before I remembered that there was such a character.
By this point, his murderous intent towards her had faded, and in the end, he didn't kill her.
Stan – in terms of role, he was the bodyguard I assigned to Kiana in the early stages.
But later it was found that it was unnecessary, since Kiana was with Lin Yu most of the time, and it was a bit strange that she could still encounter danger while with Lin Yu by her side.
In the end, it turned into a cat-and-mouth slave, and it was not until the decisive battle that he was pulled out to protect Lin Yi.
There's not much to say, let's move on to the next one.
Gray Serpent – a villainous character who should have had a more substantial storyline.
When I first wrote about the Gray Serpent, I already knew how... diverse the Gray Serpent group was.
I was quite surprised when I finished watching the story and discovered that there was actually a traitor within the Gray Serpent group.
Yes, I'm talking about Gray Serpent 1904.
The only Gray Serpent appearing in the book, besides the administrator Gray Serpent which I specifically emphasized as an independent entity, are Gray Serpent 1904.
The original plan included a plot where Gray Serpent 1904 defected, but due to the accelerated plot development, Gray Serpent 1904 never had the chance to defect.
After all, Kevin jumped first, so why should he jump?
As a super Gray Serpent snake whose appearance is different from other Gray Serpent, the administrator Gray Serpent was supposed to have a more extensive storyline.
However, as the plot accelerates, many problems become more pronounced.
For example—the combat strength of the World Serpent.
In fact, in the early part of the story, World Serpent's high-end combat power could only be maintained by Raven, the holder of the Divine Key, because Kevin was soaked in water.
Then Raven was forced to make a very awkward mistake in the book. After that, in order to survive and fit the character's persona, he sold the World Serpent, which made things very difficult afterward.
Both the Quantum Teleportation System on Cocolia's side and the Joyce Clone clearly appear after the Anti-Entropy Invasion arc.
The reason this book was rushed out of the story is simply because Cocolia and Gray Serpent were inexplicably driven into a desperate situation. If we didn't give them a boost, Lin Yu and Otto could easily overwhelm them later.
Of course, even if you strengthen it, it won't help.
The administrator in the book Gray Serpent, had already struggled very hard. He successfully unsealed Chiyou, but Chiyou climbed the Raven and was captured. He immediately rushed to St. Freya to either rescue him or kill him to silence him.
After the failure, we immediately began the next step: to obtain information from Cocolia and then launch the mass production plan for Herrscher.
After the core transfer plan of the Moon Shadow failed, they immediately launched a surprise attack on the Oceania Branch and took Wendy away. After being taken away, Wendy immediately went to Sue for help.
After discovering that Cocolia, they prepared to launch a surprise attack on Haiyuan City, using every available means possible. The plot twist of Staff of the Underworld inside her body and self-destructing—something I never even imagined—actually appeared later on...
He really works incredibly hard.
I was almost moved by their hard work.
Unfortunately, the prerequisites were insufficient, resulting in World Serpent having too few usable cards. No matter how hard it tried, I couldn't do anything about it.
If it weren't for Otto, I would never have known how to release Kevin in this book under the preconditions that "Su was looking at Haiyuan City" and "Old Yang Siegfried was completely fine."
Jackal seems to be just a pure tool, nothing much to say, let's skip him and see who's next.
The A-Lynn Sisters – clearly tools to be used.
Actually, I hardly mentioned them in the previous book, and this book doesn't have much of their storyline either, which shows that I'm not interested in these two characters anymore.
The reason this book is included is quite simple...
The World Serpent is dead.
We need even greater combat power to save Kevin.
As a result, the three people squatting at the entrance of Haiyuan City were all incredibly arrogant. Without giving them enough combat power, Old Yang solved the problem by himself, and Siegfried and Sue could just watch the show without any problem.
Although the plot never stopped during the period from Sue to Kevin's release, I was constantly trying to figure out how to release Kevin during this part of the story.
In the end, they found that even if World Serpent used all its abilities, it was no use, so they had to increase the power of World Serpent.
So Rosalia and Lilia became Fusion Warrior two years ahead of schedule, which was something that couldn't be helped.
Moreover, since these two unlucky guys didn't really have any important plot points, they barely appeared after being rescued.
Mike —the king of super extras.
Or rather, he can no longer be considered an extra; he's more of a minor supporting character.
The prototype is not Mike, but the unfortunate pilot from Resident Evil 4.
As mentioned in the previous section on protagonist character design, authors often consider the source material they are using when writing.
After finishing the previous book, I played Resident Evil 4 Remake. Even though it was on easy difficulty, I could still tell that it was a really good game.
Later in the story, when Leon finally receives support from allies, the pilot who flew the plane is named Mike.
I didn't think much of it at first, and when I saw Mike flying the plane and going on a killing spree, I thought it was finally going to be a satisfying game.
Then he was elbowed down by the villain's leader using a monster [in the original version, he was blasted down by an RPG that could turn corners].
Before he was about to take Leon away, Mike had said that he would treat Leon to drinks when he got back, but the drinks were gone in less than a minute.
I was so angry at the time. My good brother and I had finally gotten reinforcements, and then we were gone.
So the book also features a pilot Mike who has a good relationship with the protagonist, and they actually go to a bar for drinks together.
There's no other reason. The reason he keeps popping up in various places is simply because I genuinely feel regret for this character, which is why I'm adding so many scenes for him.
However, although this character was added for the reasons mentioned above, it also contains some of my views on the members of the Schicksal Headquarters.
In the storyline of this book, Mike is first and foremost a pilot who picks up and drops off [Prospective S-Rank] pilots, and in my opinion, he should be the top pilot in Schicksal.
People have personalities, but for someone to reach this level, it's definitely not just about professional skills; it also depends on other abilities.
Therefore, in the story, my approach was to portray him as a character with a tragic past, abilities, and a good understanding of human nature, someone who is at least easy to get along with.
That's about it, let's move on to the next one.
Oh, there's no next one.
I definitely can't finish 20,000 words, so that's it for the first part. I'll see if I have time to finish the second part in the next few days.
It's about 15,000 words long, a waste of time, so read with caution.
Maki – In terms of character positioning, she is similar to the original work. Everyone knows that there is such a person, and the props she provides are very important, but in reality, her role in the plot... is just so-so.
I know many people dislike this character, and frankly, I certainly don't like him either.
He has thoughts of repentance, but before repentance he was a wicked old man, and after repentance...
The heart is good.
But the brain is twitching, and actions are abstract.
It's fine for Otto to leave Schicksal because he's inhuman, and it's also fine for him to take the Tranquility Gem with him because leaving it in Schicksal would make Otto want to continue creating Herrscher of Death.
But here comes the biggest problem— Cocolia directly caused the Third Honkai Outbreak to be triggered by a super brain-dead person in the crowd. If you team up with her, I would feel bad for your actions if I didn't call you an idiot.
So in this book, after Maki encounters a spy sent by Cocolia, she immediately reports Cocolia's spy.
I think this is the kind of action a normal person should take.
Of course, joining forces with World Serpent can't really be considered a good move. After all, World Serpent made it clear in the Sky Chapter that while fighting the Honkai, they don't treat human lives as human lives. They would not only do what Cocolia did, but they would do it even better.
But Maki doesn't know this information, so in my opinion, teaming up with Gray Serpent would be at least a tiny bit better than teaming up with Cocolia.
Before strongly criticizing another idea Maki had at the time, let's talk about some relevant information about this character in the original work.
HSN Serum is indeed amazing.
So amazing that even Otto in the main storyline marveled at Dr. Mags, saying she was a true genius and that if she were still alive, he might want to have a drink with her [The Awakening of the Herrscher of the Void].
When I first saw this plot, I thought it was about Otto's best friend dying in an accident, and Otto was mourning his friend. But after reading the spin-off, I couldn't help but laugh—he was deliberately plotted against and killed by Otto.
When I was reading other books before, some people were promoting the complete nonsense that "Otto disliked unnecessary sacrifices, so he killed his granddaughter Maki because he didn't like her."
In fact, according to the manga setting in the spin-off, Otto's reason for forcing Maki to rebel was explained very clearly.
However, there will be special cases where some people become aware of the problem.
For example, high-ranking scientists from Schicksal who are also deeply involved in Honkai Energy research, or other figures at the heart of the organization.
They will gradually realize that Schicksal has intentionally avoided the key aspects of eliminating the Honkai in certain situations.
But often, before they fully discover the truth, Otto will use methods to eliminate these hidden dangers.
She secretly encouraged Dr. Mags's granddaughter to participate in experiments, resulting in her death in front of the doctor, which led to Dr. Mags's betrayal of the organization.
The above is the original text of Honkai 3rd.
Yes, Otto actually deliberately provoked Maki to rebel, at least that's how it is in the original story. It wasn't because Otto disliked unnecessary sacrifices and wanted to annoy Maki.